Content warning: Low drama, high libido Ols; these two are dangerous close to that old joke - what does a lesbian bring on a second date? A U-Haul; home is where your honey is.

I’ll be batching them, probably in four parts overall

All in this Google drive:

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1ckgUW3_P9328XCDc4CXZichdcp4VctGp?usp=sharing

Right. I checked a different series by the same author on MD, and it does seem to be “Kaneko Aru”: https://mangadex.org/title/f3bdab10-c991-40d5-b8fe-95958ac88b6b/mary (see the cover). So I’ll go with that.

115/3: Oh, I don't know JP, so it looked like sfx, but them being sleep zz's makes sense
135/2: If you think so, alright. Still reads to me like they should both be capitalized.
As far as 109/116, I've always read those as separate. But I could be wrong. 109 in particular just feels wrong having "that's" uncapitalized. Looks weird to me.

The name was spelled differently in a couple places in the text file, so just wanted to make sure which one we were using.

I changed it now to “Ah! / That’s her” anyway, because I agree it looks weird. I changed 117 similarly.

Uploaded to DS and MD. Thanks boke & Lilisionnach!

>>26835

No worries, sorry for missing that.

The missing lines are:

You mustn’t anger the Mountain Goddess.
You won’t return alive.

Sorry for the delay!
If there's anything I can do to improve it, please tell me and I'll update it.

>>26844
Good job!

>>26844
Add credits page and release if it's finished.

>>26873
bump

Surprisingly didn’t take that long, since there’s no SFX. I also discovered that there is an official English translation, but TL and TS are both very bad (see for yourself: https://www.pixiv.net/en/artworks/112511074) so I’m glad I did this anyway.

I actually know someone IRL named Rie with shitty parents and a twin sister who was their closest friend for all of childhood. I don’t think they’re quite as close as these two though…

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1Ouej8kzJpAJn5VVBlhQ0gO-pYsOvFhz9

thru page 50 (51-end are missing)

pg10 pn4: Capitalize "Mum"? Its capitalized everywhere else in the story.
pg12 pn3: "WAS seeing them fighting all the time"
pg13 pn2: I think the tl text works better here, rather than just "still..." Carries more weight.
pg20 pn1: Missing "these" before feelings
pg22 pn1: Missing comma after "hug is that"
pg22 pn3: Either "I haven't" instead of "I've never" or drop "yet"
pg32 pn1: Missing "to" - "mean TO you"
pg38 pn3: Don't need "the college". Just college. I don't think they're meaning there's only one college in the town.
pg46 pn3: uncapitalize "were"

So google decided to only select the first 50 pages for this and the other work when I used the "select all" keyboard shortcut, that's why I only had part of the review file.

Anyways, only thing of note was pages 59 & 60. Capitalization of Mum and Dad. You typically capitalize them for the first portion, so consistency would indicate they should be capitalized by the twins here too.

Nobody will probably catch stuff I missed. Interesting story.

Thanks for the review! And sorry it took so long to get back to this…

pg13: the original TL – “That was the biggest thing I felt about it. / But more than anything,” – came across contradictory to me, because she says that it’s the biggest thing, but then immediately says that there’s something bigger about it, which is why I changed it.

pg59 & 60: My rule for capitalization is that “I talked to my dad” is not capitalized, but “I talked to Dad” is, so it is consistent here. (https://www.thesaurus.com/e/grammar/capitalizing-family/)

Okay, I’ve uploaded this to Dynasty now.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Y73CYegMSQmJnsQJZxcGMwzISorGmPTQ/view?usp=sharing

clean version.
Please do let me know if i did some mistakes. Thanks :)

Here is the translation.

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/133Z5aJl4gKpvqYs1P4tF526ohFcv9Jez

Content warning: Rehab seems to be a codeword for semi-consensual bodice ripping sexual assault, or perhaps they're out of their mind because of the huffing (there's a lot of huffing); This ditzy innocent MC goes to 11; Mom is a total space cadet, but I ship her with the friend.

Yup

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/14KNW-IcijmTzYH8KC6OojrerakWlWxfS

Well this was heavy on the SFX. These chapters will take a while but I’ll get around to them.

>>26983

Thanks for taking this on. There will be some happy yurries out there.

Content Warning: Of all the ways to self-sabotage, wanting to protect your image over getting laid is one of the worst; Only two out of the three in this triangle get any character growth - and it's reflected in the boob to growth ratio; The side character is simultaneously the most helpful and most evil.

Content Warning: Between putting your gear away, vampire sex and becoming a meal, what would you choose?; the author seems to have a fetish for a certain kind of reuse; We are likely going to see all variations on this theme...

all good!

>>26926

page 8, panel 2: Hop and My soul...
page 9, panel 3: Whisper
page 15, last panel: Sniff

>>26938

Thanks! Link updated

Fixed typos and whatnot that were mentioned in the dynasty server

Woo! Thanks for the great work, everyone!

Content Warning: Sometimes getting blackout drunk and not remembering jack shit means you get a do over; Girl, I'd be pissed too; Done properly, nothing cuts through the haze like a kiss.