Gaah, finally finished this. Holy hell, those author's notes. I think I managed to get most of it but I'd still appreciate other translator input on two particular parts:
Page 11, a suitable translation for the onomatopoeia/psychomime "dekideki", presumably derived from 出æ¥; and
Also Page 11, finding some way to at least romanize "ã¨ã‚‰ã¶ã‚Šã‚…ー" (if my transcription's not wrong). Based on where it comes in in the sentence I would've believed it's a reference to one of Marine's previous doujins -- the previously translated prequel, even -- but I wasn't able to find any reference under http://www.doujinshi.org/browse/author/42267/?order=date. I also have trouble parsing it into any coherent words.
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I personally take this to be a really sweet doujin so I certainly hope you'd still take a look.