I'd love to edit this if anyone is wants to translate this :D

One shot from Yuri Hime. Content warning: Nice girl loses out, but not before getting a parting shot in, frills as landmine trigger, tsundere I wanna kick in the teeth.

Fun one-shot.

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/14pAZ1V8gVWZE25AI9R7twBM23680UEPD

Pg 109 pn 1: Capitalize "That's"
Pg 109 pn 1: Should this be a comma instead of a colon?
Pg 109 pn 1: Author Kaneko or Kinako? Spelled differently in different places
Pg 111: I think the bullets in the speech bubble should just be commas if they're being used as a separator. Looks weird using them as a separator.
Pg 112 Pn2: "Love from your old friend" is bleeding into the bubble edge
Pg 114 Pn 1: Part of the sfx above "short" is still there. Not sure if you meant to keep it.
Pg 114 Pn 4: C'mooon should have a hyphen
Pg 115 Pn 3: untranslated sfx on bottom right
Pf 116 Pn 2: Capitalize "what"
Pg 117 Pn 5: Capitalize "whoops"
Pg 117 Pn 5: May 10 not May 5
Pg 118 Pn 3: period bleeding in bubble edge
Pg 131 Pn 4: Capitalize "Landmine Girl"
Pg 135 Pn 2: Capitalize "Landmine Girl"
Pg 137 Pn 2: Capitalize "Landmine Girl"

thanks for the review, I’ve updated the pages. just waiting on Discord to get more responses and boke to clarify the image attached (whether it says Kaneko Aru or Kinako Aru).

109/1: It’s a continuation of the sentence begun with “Ah,”, so I didn’t capitalize it, since “Ah, That’s her.”
would be weird. But I also acknowledge it does look weird like this. I usually err on the side of grammatical correctness, but I’m a bit unsure… I’ll ask on Discord to get some more opinions.
109/1: A comma would work as well, but colons are fun :P
109/1: Pretty sure it’s Kaneko always, but boke can clarify.
111: I changed them to semicolons, which I think looks nice.
112/2: It’s a bit intentional since it’s sorta like that in the raws. But I adjusted it to make it less squished.
114/1: Haha, I didn’t even notice! Fixed.
115/3: That’s just “Z”s isn’t it? I don’t think it’s Japanese.
116/2: Again, I’m unsure since it is a continuation of the previous sentence – I asked on Discord.
135/2: I prefer “Landmine girls” over “Landmine Girls”, because “Landmine Girl” only works as a proper noun as it refers to a specific definitive concept, whereäs here you just have “landmine” beïng used as an adjective. Or, the problem with “Landmine Girls” is that it looks like “Landmine (Girls)”, which is wrong because that phrase is not a proper noun, rather than “(Landmine Girl)s”.

>>26998

The problem with the author name is that it could be either, and I’m not going to be able to investigate better until I get back next week.

Right. I checked a different series by the same author on MD, and it does seem to be “Kaneko Aru”: https://mangadex.org/title/f3bdab10-c991-40d5-b8fe-95958ac88b6b/mary (see the cover). So I’ll go with that.

115/3: Oh, I don't know JP, so it looked like sfx, but them being sleep zz's makes sense
135/2: If you think so, alright. Still reads to me like they should both be capitalized.
As far as 109/116, I've always read those as separate. But I could be wrong. 109 in particular just feels wrong having "that's" uncapitalized. Looks weird to me.

The name was spelled differently in a couple places in the text file, so just wanted to make sure which one we were using.

I changed it now to “Ah! / That’s her” anyway, because I agree it looks weird. I changed 117 similarly.

Uploaded to DS and MD. Thanks boke & Lilisionnach!