Content warning: Yukino receives her old-school lesbian starter pack, which includes standard issue anxieties, self loathing and jealousy; Setsuko continues to be weirdly toppy, weirdly distant, and weirdly pure; and we claw relentlessly forward towards the most contentious part of the plot driven by Yukino’s crushing insecurities and seething self hate.

05/4: “we started dating in high school” → “we started dating there” to avoid the repetition of “high school”
05/4: “gave us the excuse” → “gave us an excuse” – a more idiomatic phrase
09/4: “everyday” → “every day”; the single word is the adjective, but this is an adverb
10/1: “I want to see her too, so let’s go together.” → “I want to see her too. Let’s go together.” for flow (or “We should go together.”?)
10/5: “Too” is a bit weird, because Reika went to go to class, not do her report. Maybe replace with just “Well, I’ve got my report to do!” or “Well, I’ve got a report to be getting on with!”
11/5: “It’s all good” is a weird phrase, maybe replace with “You’ll do it, right?”
13/4: Question for boke: is it intentional that she switches from “san” to “chan” here? The pattern seems to be that she uses “-chan” in Sajimoto’s presence and “-san” otherwise, but 14/3 is an exception to that…?
14/4: “They borrow my PJs” → “They borrow them”
21/4: “An unused place” → “an spare apartment” to avoid repetition of “place”

>>27079

Thanks for QC!

> 10/5: “Too” is a bit weird, because Reika went to go to class, not do her report. Maybe replace with just “Well, I’ve got my report to do!” or “Well, I’ve got a report to be getting on with!”

I thought it was fine. Reika did talk about reports on page 5, so I was assuming Ito was going off of that.

>>27079

13/4: Question for boke: is it intentional that she switches from “san” to “chan” here? The pattern seems to be that she uses “-chan” in Sajimoto’s presence and “-san” otherwise, but 14/3 is an exception to that…?

13/4 Yes.

14/3 should be -chan too. If I put -san, it's my mistake.

>>27088

I thought Ito always says Sajimoto-chan. She uses -san sometimes?

Well, everytime Ito says Sajimoto’s name, I put a -chan in there. Let me know if that’s wrong.

Content Warning: This story is about the journey of a useless lesbian to the holy land; Acting cool is great and all, but nothing trumps getting laid; Got to love a younger girl who knows what she wants, and is willing to cut her nails to do it.

Content warning: When you are suuuuper uptight, under pressure and have a looming engagement you want nothing to do with, yeah existential murder likely makes sense; Also don't expect people to think you are footloose and fancy free when you have said engagement; But plucky courage wins the day - you have been warned.

After pondering on it for a while, I think another take on the title would be:

"That Lovely Person Happens to be..."

Feel free to use or ignore

Thank for being so pro-active about this. I'll take a look an the new links over the next couple of days.

I agree. Very thankful for the help!

Content warning: mostly schoolgirls mostly spicy, onee-sans can be creepers too, lack of consequences for bad behavior.

I’ve done the remaining three chapters: A Stimulating Love, A Summer Story and Cream Soda Flavoured. All in the Drive link.

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1ymaEmbDe9LZ99MvehBwuYi_71wJNGRTo

Wootie!

Thanks for the tl. I'm gonna give editing this a shot.

Editing is done and ready for QC.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1EdcoesdSSj4hi1htpKjS7bedNeZ3qjrX/view?usp=share_link

>>26239
Thanks for your hard work! Here are some suggestions.

>>26286

Appreciate the QC! I made all of your suggested edits, on top of bumping up the text size all around.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1oKSVDwMv_2M6T9SKzCo6hJbEPin_zrn6/view?usp=sharing

Also uploaded this one to Dynasty. Yet to upload to MD becuase I don’t know its chapter number, but I’ll get around to it.

Thanks for the translation! Gonna edit this.

Editing/typesetting done, needs QC.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1voT9gO4-exFBQNa2GnURR0pY3QyCM7rE/view?usp=share_link

only 16 months late…

Just some nits that can be ignored.

06/4: Questions without question marks read weirdly to me; perhaps use “?!” or “!?”
19: Preferable to remove the Japanese text on the side
20/3: I’m not really fond of punctuation on next line

>>26951

Thanks for the QC! Updated version with your changes is here:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1O5FdSs5XlhxhJ8gmz4UjaYS21fBQ0SEY/view?usp=sharing

Uploaded to Dynasty and MD! Thanks for your work and responsiveness :)

03/6: Missing the “room…?” part?
04/3: The narration text could be a little larger?
15: Line spacing not updated

Loving the credits page btw

Glad you like it~ ^^

Sorry about the mistakes. Take a look now, please~

All good! Looks ready for upload to me.

Oh by the way, try to avoid uploading from those JPEGs, because then you end up with three levels of compression:

1. the original raws are in JPEG format;
2. JPEG compression happens when you export to JPEGs;
3. sites like Dynasty Reader compress it again server-side.

So it’s usually better to use a lossless format like PNG for keeping the edited raws, because compressing multiple times is not a great idea.

that was really my bad. if chu want, lunae lily can resend the files in .png