Content warning: The neighbor girl's got some grr in her tank; If you don't let your co-dependent girlfriend have some quality co-dependent time, she might just walk out on your ass; and when two repressed wanna be lesbians actually get out of their "tee-hee" phase, we might as well call the subtext dead.

Do you (or anyone) have a version without the watermarks in the corners?

>>26884

I don't, sorry.

>>26887

No worries. If anyone comes across raws without watermarks and willing to provide it, I'd appreciate it. Otherwise, I'll make do somehow.

boke, if it's not too much trouble, can you also translate page 23?

>>26896

--23
-1

Why did you even make such a fuss that people found out?

hw- You seem like you'd be good at keeping secrets

Ah...

-2

hw- I got these when playing around, and forgot that they were in my bag

Kagami-san...
you wore bunny ears earlier, right?

-3

Wha?
Because of that?!
###bold and italicize "that"

hw- Ka-Ka-Kagami-san was wearing bunny ears!

Miya-chan...

Yeah...

-4

The next day.

I brought them!

hw- See? See?

hw- Whaddya think?

Why would you even...?

>>26896

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1dNMImWfemAPhHag1PETqkhJefUH5K1tF?usp=sharing

Thanks for the TL! Getting one page out isn't too hard.

> Why did you even make such a fuss that people found out?

What does this mean? Does it mean the fuss she made is how people found out?

>>26898

Yeah, this made me scratch my head too for a while. I think she is talking about the very start of the story when Oomiya started talking about liking Kagami. Maybe we can change it to

"Why did you even admit liking me to start with?"

>>26899

Thanks, that sounds better. Link updated

Raws: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1nedYWsrQ_ssC92Tg21Ordd91Hs2fnIRs?usp=sharing

^ Here are the Vol 1 raws for Dengeki Comics NEXT version. Didn't realize there were multiple releases when I bought it... But at least the confusion around volume 2 makes sense now.

There's a single page extra after chapter 1 that's different between the two releases. Boke translated it and I should have it typeset soon.

I haven't done a thorough comparison between the two releases yet. But it wouldn't surprise me if the Dengeki Comics NEXT version included more content.

Updated my google link to include both extras

Chatted with Rozmontis (who released chapter 2) and they'll release one more chapter and we can pick it up from there.

Did rosmontis have a genuine translator for those chapters or was it just rosmontis himself with his MTL and dictionary?

>>26911

I assumed himself (according to the credits page) but I didn't ask.

Then I would suggest doing ch2 and 3 for both dynasty and MD just to have a non-MTL version

>>26915

Sure. It makes releasing easier. I can release based on the Dengeki version. I think the main differences between comic gaga and dengeki next are the after stories and some of the one page extras. Not sure if any of the main chapters differ (hopefully not).

I don't think I can release as fast as Rozmontis but I'll try my best. Thanks for everyone's patience in advance.

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1mfXSe_f37n_HMLuig9PRkI9y5Ew5J3_d?usp=sharing

Added a disclaimer about the different releases.

The main thing I remember changing from the translation is the SFX on page 7 ("chatter" to "shake").

002/2: “stanning on” is weird to me, should just be “stanning” or “stanning for”
003/1: “On” is similarly weird
005/3: “Starting” → “Staring”
005/3: Hmm, the comma feels awkward. Possibly just split into two sentences: “Her fingers are so perfect! I totally stan her!”
006/1: Minor flag at the repetition of “staring”; could also say “catch me doing it” or something
006/2: I’d suggest to remove the “So”, but I can’t explain why
013/2: Increase the white border, for similarity to the raw & readability
013/3: Bubble looks a bit off-center?
013/9: “She’s so easy going” looks off-center?
013/9: “easy going” → “easygoing” (in this case hyphenated as “easy-going”); the single-word form seems more common
015/1: Maybe move the “I” in “just what have I” to the next box?
022/4: Punctuation after “OMG” would be good, I think

>>26948

> 005/3: Hmm, the comma feels awkward. Possibly just split into two sentences: “Her fingers are so perfect! I totally stan her!”

I like the sentence, so I just removed the comma.

> 006/2: I’d suggest to remove the “So”, but I can’t explain why

Really? I like the "So". Nice transition word.

> 015/1: Maybe move the “I” in “just what have I” to the next box?

I did, but the big box now kinda looks like its own sentence...

Tweaked the disclaimer a bit.

boke, can you take a look at the table of contents? Chapter 3 and the 2nd after story. Is her name "Aragi" or "Araki"?

>>26961

Araki

>>26962

Thanks, fixed!

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1LMFMqUVlohaR_Y6F5gpBX78U_pxPisA7?usp=sharing

Notes:

pg2 - I added flip sfx
pg4/5 - 2nd to last panel - One of the texts was missing. I was confused which was supposed to be the handwriting text. I just put something there to fill in the blank.
pg6 - The conversation is kinda strange. The verbs don't quite match. Also is it spelled "belles-lettres"?
pg7 - Is it a literal number 7 on the note card? Not the "ku" katakana?
pg13 - Couple of the panel 2 text were missing.
pg18 - I added waah sfx

boke, can you check over these?

>>26971

pg2 - Thx
pg4/5 - Actually, you nailed it.
pg6 - Can you point out the panels you mean?
Also is it spelled "belles-lettres"? -> Yes, thanks
pg7 - Seems like it's a kanji "kukatsuyou" meaning the classical form of the i- adjective inflection
pg13 - You nailed it.
pg18 - Perfect

06/1: I don’t like the repeated “But” from the previous page, especially since it means “But” is used twice in this panel, so I suggest to remove it.
06/1: Is “Your” not bolded/italicized intentionally? I think it helps.
07/1: “Mmm” SFX cleaned but not added?
07/1: Crossbar “I” in “It’s”
08/1: At “Keri…”, maybe use a slightly different brush for the redraw of the white parts?
10/3: Crossbar “I” in “It’s”
11/7: “One” → “one”
13/3: boke said “You nailed it.” which I’m assuming is a mistake, since the bubbles are empty. I suggest “Ahh… / That’s, / uh…”
14/1: Crossbar “I” in “It’s”
19/1: Crossbar “I” in “Is”
19/2: As above

>>26975

06/1: Please remove the first "but"
06/1: Good call.
13/3: haha... I was too focussed on the handwritten text and blipped over the empty bubbles. "Whoa..." "That's uh, actually..." and remove the "actually" from the bubble in panel 3

>>26974

> Can you point out the panels you mean?

Whoops, forgot to include the panels. I meant the last two panels. The verbs switch between "loved" vs "was" and I was kinda confused.

> 08/1: At “Keri…”, maybe use a slightly different brush for the redraw of the white parts?

I don't really know how to do that. Do you mean making the edges more blurry?

> Crossbar “I” in “It’s”

Did you want me to remove it? It's just part of the font. I used CCVictorySpeech for the main dialogue and CCTallTales for past dialogue.

> > 08/1: At “Keri…”, maybe use a slightly different brush for the redraw of the white parts?
> I don't really know how to do that. Do you mean making the edges more blurry?

I suppose, yeah. It also doesn’t matter that much.

> > Crossbar “I” in “It’s”
> Did you want me to remove it? It's just part of the font. I used CCVictorySpeech for the main dialogue and CCTallTales for past dialogue.

Both fonts have glyphs for both crossbar and non-crossbar I though, right? In the very same bubble there’s a non-crossbar “I” used in the word “if”. (The rule, I believe, is that only the personal pronoun should be crossbar). Another example is in 10/3 where “it” is written both with crossbar and without crossbar I in the same bubble.

>>26978

> Both fonts have glyphs for both crossbar and non-crossbar I though, right? In the very same bubble there’s a non-crossbar “I” used in the word “if”. (The rule, I believe, is that only the personal pronoun should be crossbar). Another example is in 10/3 where “it” is written both with crossbar and without crossbar I in the same bubble.

Seems like CCVictorySpeech uses crossbar for any uppercase "I". CCTallTales only keeps the crossbar for the personal pronouns. As soon as I add another letter, crossbar gone. At least, that's what happening to me. I didn't know there was a rule, but I actually like the crossbar for all uppercase "I"s. Should I change fonts to be consistent with one or the other?

> Seems like CCVictorySpeech uses crossbar for any uppercase "I"

Does it? That’s not how it behaves on my computer. See the attached image: there are two different “I”s, no?

> I didn't know there was a rule, but I actually like the crossbar for all uppercase "I"s.

I don’t personally have a preference. I know of some experiënced scanlators who very annoyed about crossbar “I”s that are not for personal pronouns so to avoid upsetting them I would usually do the conventional thing.

>>26980

> Does it? That’s not how it behaves on my computer. See the attached image: there are two different “I”s, no?

Are they different casing? I have crossbars only on the uppercase.

Maybe my downloads were faulty or something. They do show up kinda funky in the program. I'll try to reinstall them.

>>26980

Ok I uninstalled the font and installed a version from a different source, and now I'm getting crossbars on only personal pronouns. Yay!

Links should have updated pages.

boke, in addition to this (>>26977), do you know why Mikoto's test results slip has a slightly different name on it? "Sasamori" on slip vs "Suwa" in introduction

>>26984

I’m traveling and won’t be able to look at it for about a week. If you can post images, I’ll reconsile the difference

>>26985

I included both the original and edited versions.

>>26986

Ugh, that was me moving to fast and making assumptions. It’s actually Sasasmori Juku, the name of the cram school.

>>26991

And page 6? The verbs switch between "loved" vs "was" and I was kinda confused.

>>27014

It would be short for "Aokawa Ichirou wasn't a proponent of Belles-Lettres."

Does that answer your question?

>>27021

Not really. The verb switch is still confusing.

The conversation sounds something like this:

> Who loved books?
> Person A.
> Person A wasn't books.

It doesn't make sense to me. But if it's like that in the original, I guess I won't dwell on it too long.

Maybe "wasn't into" would be better (Person A wasn't into books), if it matches the original intent.

>>27026

It's more like:

Who was an example of XX school of literature?

Aokawa.

No, that's wrong. But Aokawa did like this other series of books.

>>27027

I think simplifying the second bubble to just “No, that’s wrong” helps a bit more. Could I change it to that? But if that’s too different from the original, then we can leave in your original translation. I’ll chalk it up as the two just studying on an higher level than I can understand and that’s fine with me.

>>27028

How about something like:

Bzzt. Aokawa wasn't in that movement.

>>27029

Yea, that sounds good. I updated that page. Thanks for the help.

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1LMFMqUVlohaR_Y6F5gpBX78U_pxPisA7?usp=sharing

Ch 4: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1gXBEglYKDU7v7Njk-vqm78barFi-rI--?usp=sharing

Notes:

pg6, panel 3 - Should it be "ever since" or "even since"? Both works. The latter just threw me off a bit.

pg17, panel 1 - I added crash sfx.

05/4: “we started dating in high school” → “we started dating there” to avoid the repetition of “high school”
05/4: “gave us the excuse” → “gave us an excuse” – a more idiomatic phrase
09/4: “everyday” → “every day”; the single word is the adjective, but this is an adverb
10/1: “I want to see her too, so let’s go together.” → “I want to see her too. Let’s go together.” for flow (or “We should go together.”?)
10/5: “Too” is a bit weird, because Reika went to go to class, not do her report. Maybe replace with just “Well, I’ve got my report to do!” or “Well, I’ve got a report to be getting on with!”
11/5: “It’s all good” is a weird phrase, maybe replace with “You’ll do it, right?”
13/4: Question for boke: is it intentional that she switches from “san” to “chan” here? The pattern seems to be that she uses “-chan” in Sajimoto’s presence and “-san” otherwise, but 14/3 is an exception to that…?
14/4: “They borrow my PJs” → “They borrow them”
21/4: “An unused place” → “an spare apartment” to avoid repetition of “place”

>>27079

Thanks for QC!

> 10/5: “Too” is a bit weird, because Reika went to go to class, not do her report. Maybe replace with just “Well, I’ve got my report to do!” or “Well, I’ve got a report to be getting on with!”

I thought it was fine. Reika did talk about reports on page 5, so I was assuming Ito was going off of that.

>>27079

13/4: Question for boke: is it intentional that she switches from “san” to “chan” here? The pattern seems to be that she uses “-chan” in Sajimoto’s presence and “-san” otherwise, but 14/3 is an exception to that…?

13/4 Yes.

14/3 should be -chan too. If I put -san, it's my mistake.

>>27088

I thought Ito always says Sajimoto-chan. She uses -san sometimes?

Well, everytime Ito says Sajimoto’s name, I put a -chan in there. Let me know if that’s wrong.