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712727 No.2529  

One-shot, 20 pages.

TL: http://www.mediafire.com/?0n10fcsczb3ida3

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>> No.21601  

http://www.mediafire.com/file/5ykpk99s21yco6r/Organ_no_Oneesan_Cleans.zip

>> No.25793  
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Ten years old. Just the way you like it. Content warning: Age gap, lesbian watching her love interest get married, neighbor girl hot for her organ.

>> No.25892  

I'll get started on this

>> No.25925  

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/19085UlofaUqcfTyBXgCctFFEkQRsjGo8?usp=share_link

> A little curt, but I liked her a lot.

I had to do a double take because I did not read it as "curt" at first lmao

pg 10, panel 2, bubble 3 - missing small text

>> No.25950  
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Good work everyone, I've got a few suggestions for line changes.

>> No.25951  

>>25950

No issues with any suggestion.

>> No.25960  
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69819

I updated the pages.

There's still this small text on page 10 that's untranslated. Unless it's already conveyed in the main text?

>> No.25962  

>>25960

It means "That's right"

>> No.25968  

>>25962

Thanks, added

>> No.25969  

Here are a few minor adjustments.

p005
"So she / smokes / cigaret- / tes..." -> "So she / smokes / ciga- / rettes..." Move hyphen to syllable break.

p006
"you just have an older brother, ust like me, right?" (fix typo on second "just")

p010
"who / got jea- / lous!?" -> "who / got jeal- / ous!?" or "who got / jealous!?" Move hyphen to syllable break.

"you don't have to pretend. after you're the person who lost your graduation album too, hm, come to think of it." -> "you don't have to pretend. after all, you "lost" your graduation album too. hm, come to think of it—" minor rephrase, "after" -> "after all,", "too," -> "too.", "think of it." -> "think of it—"

"you've got wedding planning meeting, right?" -> "you've got a wedding planning meeting, right?" Add an "a".

p014
""Jealous"" -> ""Jealous.""

>> No.25970  

>>25969

Nice catches.

>> No.26001  

>>25969

Updated the link!

>> No.26009  

>>26001

Released.



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