Organ girl

page 4

	panel 1
	Too much of a pain, so... ah...!
	Too much of a pain, so―ah!

	She's interrupting herself since she's worried about being late, I think this punctuation might convey that better

page 5

	panel 3
	The back of my neck tingles. Somehow it tickles in a funny way. But the way she smiles hasn't changed.
	The way she smiles hasn't changed. It still makes the back of my neck tingle, like it tickles somehow.

page 6

	panel 5
	But she's gonna become my real sister.
	But she's gonna become my sister.

	The "hontou no oneesan" only really makes sense in comparison to the prior line, where she calls her "otonari no oneesan". If we're going with "a former neighbor", then I think it's best to leave out "real" here.

page 7

	panel 3
	No! No! No!
	Please, please, please!

	I'm pretty sure this is Mika speaking here, begging Ritsu to play. She says ねえ again like in the previous panel's ねえ　引いてよ

	panel 3
	Nnnn...
	Nngh...

	This is just personal preference, I like my groans to have gh in them to show just how frustrated you are.

page 10

	panel 3
	All those old ones.
	All those old things.

	Just think this sounds a bit more natural, more dismissive here.

page 11

	panel 1
	That's why she feels sad like that.
	That's why she looked so sad.

	I think this line is a comment specifically on how Ritsu looked just a moment ago, with the 今のさびしそう

page 17

	panel 1
	Are you going out with someone?
	Do you have someone you like?

	Do you love them... even if they have someone else they love?
	Would you love them... even if they have someone else they love?