Someone translated this on /u/, but it needs TLC. Anyone can help with this?
http://archive.loveisover.me/u/thread/1923365

>>19513
Page 7
Note the order:
Oh right! = そうだ! (by the bubble)
Really?! = ホント!? (on the right, but it's a response to the bubble)

Page 9
That guy says "アンナ, サラ" (Anna, Sara). 早紀 is almost always Saki, and Sara isn't even listed on things like baby name sites, but googling "早紀 さら" does give one result of a person named 早紀 read as Sara.

The translation looks good, just fix the grammar here and there.

>>19517
Thanks for checking this out. I don't have time to edit this now. I'm working on other projects right now (cleaning last chapters of YuriKuma Arashi Vol 3 for /u/ and editing Silver Gymnasium Vol 1-2 here). Anyone feel free to work on this.

Lemme pick this up.

Since there was no recent word of anyone else editing this, I went ahead and did the 1st chapter. I haven't edited in years so I'm a lil' rusty. I plan to do the other chapters as well.

http://www.mediafire.com/?nnwr3uihq83gqi5

>>20042
>>19517
Looks good and the script reads much better.

About page 9 (page 13 in the edited version), looking through the raws at page 72 that same guy says サキ, so サラ on page 9 must have been a typo. So 'Sara' on page 9 should go back to 'Saki'.

Page 15 last bubble and page 17 last bubble have some dust.

>>20042
Is there something important on page 22? It's not translated.

>>20045
Fixed.

http://www.mediafire.com/?q0q0mlhdx7vw1vx

>>20046
Sorry, I don't know. I'm not a translator. However, judging by the last date (June 26th 2015) I would assume that the author is talking about all the important steps that were taken to fully legalize same-sex marriage in the US. The author also mentions "Proposition 8" in one of the 2008 dates, which was a proposition for California to ban same-sex marriage. It passed, but thankfully it was overturned by a federal court in 2010 (which is the year when the manga was originally drawn, I guess). The court ruling didn't get into effect until June 26th 2013, though, which is another date the author mentions as some kind of supplement.

>>20046
It says what the difference is between federal and state laws in America and a history of gay marriage rights in California.

>>20047
Released.

>>20053
I changed the font of the narration to make it distinguishable from thoughts. Could you update the download link, please?

>>20059
Sure, updated.

https://drive.google.com/open?id=0B-NAcy6fcWxoSHl3eVBoc01zNjA

>>20515

Are there supposed to be two more pages in this chapter?

>>20515
Page 25
Let's have gas station for UFO. =>
Let's have a gas station for UFOs.

even without a reference material. =>
even without reference material.

Page 26
I lived in Japan for while =>
I lived in Japan for a while

There were bittersweet =>
Those were bittersweet

Um... Perhaps. =>
Mhm... Perhaps.

Page 27
the last memory =>
the last memory of my family

Page 29
It a marriage rash =>
It's a marriage rash

'Cause finally able to marry. =>
'Cause we're finally able to marry.

Page 31
Yesterday, I was officialy =>
Yesterday, I was officially

Page 32
You look calm but / actually a hard worker =>
You look a carefree type / but you're actually a hard worker.

Page 35
If you're wondering, the arrow pointing at the headband is for Japanese readers who can't read "Sean". I guess you can leave it.

A credits page should be added.

Do you want me to add Page 37 & 38 from the raws?

https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B-NAcy6fcWxoSHl3eVBoc01zNjA/view?usp=sharing

>added pgs 37 & 38 and the credits page

>>20524
Released.

https://drive.google.com/open?id=0B-NAcy6fcWxoMmZBRDhIX0toYkk

>this seriously needs some QC
>i'll add the credits later

>>20541

https://drive.google.com/open?id=0B-NAcy6fcWxoRmJ5SThGWWdpOUU

>>20626

Aside from the couple of untranslated SFX, it looks pretty good to me.

>>20626
Page 39
Under staircase ->
Under the staircase

The credits page is still missing.

https://drive.google.com/open?id=0B-NAcy6fcWxoZ2J0YW50X1dvM2s

>>20635 Sorry, I forgot the credits again.

>>20646

96 not 69, haha

>>20648 lol. Sorry bout that.

>>20645
>>20657
Released.

pg 43, "He died in traffic accident"
shouldnt that be "He died in a traffic accident"?

>>20680 fixed

>>20687
Updated.

https://drive.google.com/open?id=0B-NAcy6fcWxoMHBnTGFIaTdfV1k

>>20730

https://drive.google.com/open?id=0B-NAcy6fcWxoMHBnTGFIaTdfV1k

>>20765

Dude, you seem to have a lot of time on your hands, considering all the editing you've been doing. Haha

>>20765
Page 63
Does all-girls school have lesbians after all? ->
Do all-girl schools really have lesbians?

Page 67
Newcomer only makes excuses. ->
The newcomer only makes excuses.

Page 68
Fatigue is disappearing. ->
My fatigue is disappearing.

https://drive.google.com/open?id=0B-NAcy6fcWxodFkzQ29xVWdZUUk

>>20867
Released.

error in pg 59

>"and will get working visa too."

"and will get a working visa too."

Bump. I forgot about this. I should do this soon.

>>20877

>>21820
Updated.

CHAPTER 5:
https://www.dropbox.com/sh/l292l3dlc6ridaj/AADsrmUkmpx5HaXe_m83nbfHa?dl=0

CHAPTER 6:
https://www.dropbox.com/sh/56v7xiuhslq5gn3/AABRM3n_hztUyQz0ZamlcrPCa?dl=0

>>21828

pg88

-panel 3, bubble 1
..."the marriage" -> ..."the marriage,"

pg98

-last panel
saki's -> Saki's

pg102

-panel 1, bubble 2
...what I always... -> ...what I've always...

pg103

-last panel, last bubble
check if there's an extra space between "I" and "lose"

I dont know why but I think some dialogue doesn’t really makes much sense... i think

This thing is still not licensed in English? Hope you guys can finish this.

Are ch5 and ch6 releasable as-is?