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Don't remove punctuation from the script. Don't add misspellings: just copy and paste the lines from the script, don't retype them. Make sure all sentences end in punctuation, like the first bubble should end in "." and the second bubble in "...". Don't cramp the bubble edges too much, reduce font size where appropriate.
page 96
Don't you have an obligation to explain things to us properly? =>
Don't you owe people an explanation?
With Kajima also out serving his suspension =>
With Kanajima also out serving his suspension,
page 99
Hard to believe from looking at him, that he's got kid in middle school... =>
Hard to believe from looking at him, that he's got a kid in middle school...
page 101
Your a classmate? =>
You're a classmate of hers?
page 102
I see =>
Right.
But not a friend, right? =>
But you aren't her friend, right?
There's no way that girl would have any friends. =>
There's no way that girl'd have friends.
Because she's an idiot, you see. =>
'Cause she's an idiot, you see.
Idiots can't possibly make any friends. =>
Idiots can't make friends.
She's been that way since she was born. She takes after her mother. =>
Kid was cursed from the start. Taking after her mother.
Only her face is good. Her mind, on the other hand... =>
She's got the looks, but not the brain.
page 103
How can you speak like that about a child? =>
How can you speak like that about your child?!
"Hey, even I hate to say it" <-- there is dust in that bubble under the 's' from 'say'.
page 104
That's not really any kind of evidence that any of it was any of my doing. =>
That doesn't proof it was by my doing.
page 105
even if you are a child. =>
even if she is a child.
I wonder could your parents pay it? =>
I wonder if your parents could pay that.
page 109
Coming at a time like this... are you really that desperate to stand out!? =>
Coming at a time like this... are you really /that/ desperate to stand out!?
(emphasis)
"* outside ? sidelines ?" <-- She is deaf left.
Is it fun? --being able to say whatever you like from the left-hand side. =>
Are you enjoying saying that crap to her left ear?
page 110
Alright, I'm starting homeroom!
All right, I'm starting homeroom!
page 111
Alright then, see you all next week. =>
All right then, see you all next week.
page 112
Are you coming over? =>
Ohh, I'm coming over!
(dust in bubble)
"I've already been smeared all over with sweet, sticky sugar." <-- dust in this bubble
The things I see, the things I touch, anything and everything--it all clings messily to me. =>
Everything I see or touch becomes a sticky mess.
page 116
Is this something you intend to pursue right after highschool? =>
Is this something you intend to pursue right after high school?
Or perhaps your looking to go on to the National Defense Academy as a "gorgeous officer-candidate", type of deal? =>
Or perhaps you're looking to go on to the National Defense Academy as a "gorgeous officer-candidate", type of deal?
**Form says Yamada Nagisa first choice: Self Defense Force =>
**The forms says Yamada Nagisa's first choice is Self Defense Force.
Highschool is something it's definately better to get yourself through.
High school is something you definitely should get yourself through.
It will make the rest of your life that much easier. =>
It will make the rest of your life much easier.
Even if you have to split part time work between school hours, there are ways to accommadate that. =>
Even if you need a part-time job there are accommodations.
(There is dust in this bubble)
page 118
If my own mother hadn't spoiled that fu--er, my brother rotten, he wouldn't have turned out like that =>
If Mother hadn't spoiled that brat, I mean my brother, rotten, he wouldn't have turned out like that...
page 119
In this case your like the mother. =>
In this case /you're/ like the mother.
(there is emphasis on /you're/, too)
page 120
"...No..." <-- leftover dot in the bubble.
As for your brother, I'll come the house and confront him personally. =>
As for your brother, I'll come to the house and confront him personally.
page 121
"What your brother needs right now is /other people/! <-- dust in bubble, "/other people/" is not emphasized.
what you need right now is security! =>
what you need right now is /security/!
(emphasis)
"But in so many households these days, those things are in chronic short supply." <-- dust in bubble under "many"
page 124
"Sorry. He just kept going on and on, blah blah blah..." <-- dust in bubble
"About what?" <-- dust in bubble
