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1629072 No.26657  

If you are a fan of *Crescent Moon and Doughnuts", you likely will enjoy this sweet story. 59 pages.

https://www.mediafire.com/file/mpkkzk35rndn82c/Tamago_no_Tsurezure.zip/file

>> No.26658  
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Content warning: Take a lesbian and a hetero flexible ace woman and throw them in a cocktail shaker and you get a nice liberation libation; yeah, she's codependent, but damn, everyone should be loved that way; the sneak attacks and sly smiles show she's into it.

>> No.26776  

This was really fun!

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1r7SVrwZBgF3WTMNhnAcQepjOu05KBBwR

>> No.26805  

Pages 51-60 are missing.

>> No.26806  

>>26805

Yeah, it's missing in the raws.

>> No.26810  

Okay, found the missing pages. Stupid Google.

Pg5 pn2: Capitalize "Incoming"
Pg22 pn4: "...living with Jun was" needs punctuation. Ellipses would probably work.
Pg29 pn2: This reads weird. Should this say "And, it's not like I only love MEN either"? She's talking about why she's not refuting being a lesbian. So in her mind, she justifying why keeping the label is okay, since she's living with a lesbian, AND she doesn't only love men.

>> No.26811  

>>26810

Thanks for the PR. For page 29, how about this:

But it’s not like I only go for women.

>> No.26812  

hmmm, maybe its just worded weird in the original text. Or maybe she's addressing why she doesn't accept OR deny by stating two different statements here. If that's the case, then having women in the wording makes sense. So she's saying, she doesn't deny the allegations because she is living with a lesbian, but she doesn't accept them because the doesn't love only women. Okay, that makes more sense now that I've typed it out. I guess the wording was just throwing me off.

>> No.26813  

So maybe the best solution would be to add a "but" to the line "it's not like I only love women either." to indicate that these aren't a continuous statement.

>> No.26814  

>>26813

Works for me!

>> No.26919  

Thanks! Updated now, I’ll upload at some point.

In page 5, “Incoming” was actually capitalized, it just looks a bit weird. I moved it up one pixel and it fixed it.



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