Pretty much the oldest project I could find on Yuri Project. Trigger warning: sexual abuse. Content warning: jackhammers are the biggest vibrators, bees do it too, absence makes the bee grow fonder.

I'll try editing this

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1GfoKEpM3ffor8QUFY962xQ3vmJcIgL0z/view?usp=sharing

On page 18

> Well, gotta be used to it do road work.

I don't know what this means.

It means the workers need to be used to the vibrations in order to do their job. Maybe a better TL would be:

Well, the workers must be used to it.

Thanks for the clarification! I updated that page.

The link I posted above looks wrong, so here's a new one: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1Il21Ta9QYVjjLrvZqCD2WbcA-8slbxQ1?usp=sharing

Nice work! Looks good from my point of view. If no one steps up to do additional PR, I say release it.

Well, I PR’d it anyway.

02/4: is that ハs? do they need translating?
04/7: “Too hard” → “Too hard!”
05/1: I wouldn’t put a comma after “But”
05/5: To avoid the incorrect hyphenation of “Shouldn’t”, perhaps replace with “Don’t touch those”
06/7: “like I like” is weird to me; what about “that I like”?
06/7: “Like whether it's OK to just hate it, or if you’ll run into it again” – this sentence doesn’t make sense to me? I’m not sure what it’s supposed to mean
07: Missing the title at the top of the page
07/1: “Boy are dumb” → “Boys are dumb”
10/1: “I was clear” → “It was clear”
11/1: “Kya” → “Kya!”
14/2: “With” → “with”
15/4: “We only can” → “can only” reads more naturally to me
16/1: “The hands” → “the hands”
16/2: “Were quietly” → “were quietly”
16/5: “All I could think of was…” → “All I could think of…” (to remove the duplicate “was”)
16/6: “Was that I” → “was that I”
16/6: “Wanted to go” → “wanted to go”
17/2: “keep” → “kept”
17/3: 1st bubble off-center
18/2: It’s not updated?
19/5: “Domesticated” → “domesticated”
19/5: “She’s” → “she’s”
19/6: “And” → “and”
20/1: “That I wanted to go” → “wanting to go” reads better I think
20/3: “with her” is off-center
20/5: Not so keen on the title case; it makes it feel too unnatural.

>>26949

Didn't realize that I forgot to release this... Well, probably a good thing I forgot haha

> 02/4: is that ハs? do they need translating?

Wow, I didn't even notice these. Boke, can you translate them.

> 16/5: “All I could think of was…” → “All I could think of…” (to remove the duplicate “was”)

Thought that was intentional, but I removed it anyway.

Regarding the capitalization after the ellipses, I usually capitalize the following word. But reading up on it, I guess you're not supposed to do that unless it's a new sentence. Though, I'll probably draw the line if it crosses to a new page.

> 16/1: “The hands” → “the hands”

I don't think this is continuing off from the bubble text and would stay capitalized.

> 19/5: “She’s” → “she’s”

I think this would be a new sentence and would stay capitalized.

> 20/1: “That I wanted to go” → “wanting to go” reads better I think

From the last bit of page 19 to page 20, "All I could think of was... That I wanting to go along with her." ? I think I prefer "wanted" here.

>>26953

"Fling Whish Whoosh"

>>26953

And btw, it's boke, not Boke.

> From the last bit of page 19 to page 20, "All I could think of was... That I wanting to go along with her." ? I think I prefer "wanted" here.

Sorry, I was suggesting “All I could think of was… wanting to go along with her”. Using “wanted” makes it read like a double past-tense which is a bit confusing to me. (I mean, it’s not that bad either way)

>>26956

Ah, much apologies. Then boke, can you also take a look at this sentence?

> 06/7: “Like whether it's OK to just hate it, or if you’ll run into it again” – this sentence doesn’t make sense to me? I’m not sure what it’s supposed to mean

>>26957

> Sorry, I was suggesting “All I could think of was… wanting to go along with her”. Using “wanted” makes it read like a double past-tense which is a bit confusing to me. (I mean, it’s not that bad either way)

Oh, that makes more sense. I changed it to that. Both sound right to me.

>>26958

> 06/7: “Like whether it's OK to just hate it, or if you’ll run into it again” – this sentence doesn’t make sense to me? I’m not sure what it’s supposed to mean

She's talking about assessing all the dangerous things. Maybe a different TL would be:

"Like, is it ok to just hate it from a distance, or is there a chance you'll run into it again?"

Let me know if that makes sense

>>26959

Makes sense to me, thanks!

Pages should be updated: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1Il21Ta9QYVjjLrvZqCD2WbcA-8slbxQ1?usp=sharing