Breezy little story, should be easy to edit. Content warning: crushed by the system, slapped by the system, escape from the system.

Very nice story; I'll try to edit it.

https://mega.nz/file/lZ8WBB5L#rlQSxVauX48zZx7nvztlkuqfk7UC-Qko_NxwCl3yBZ8

Redraw and typeset done, waiting for PR/QC.

Still waiting for PR/QC.

Here's some suggestions, a few typoes and just some lines I think could be a bit smoother. Other than that it looks good.

>>26304

Thank you for your comments!

https://mega.nz/file/UBNlTQRC#gKhXQJCKoP-4u77Q4CtNMIUN2lXBJBmuwCxUWSG22hU

I added all the suggestions, and also rephrased page 17 last bubble, I think it reads better now.

If there are no more comments, I think it's ready for release.

Ah, sorry, I think one more thing I missed.

On page 09, he text in the first two boxes should be swapped. In the Japanese, the first box's text is structured as an attributive clause applying to the second, but that doesn't really work in English.

>>26314

Ah yes, it makes sense. Text swapped.

https://mega.nz/file/tENXzahJ#riUhLu46j33uAkob-q79fuDbI7i9iCwKeR_8NMePijQ

Unless there are more changes, this one is ready to be released.

>>26321

Released.

pg 13, "every since" -> "ever since"

>>26330
was this fixed?

I forgot to reply; I've been busy.
If anybody wants to update the page, here it is the corrected version.