Thank you! Some general comments before we bother with details:
The leveling is pretty inconsistent. Some pages are fine, some have weak blacks, some are really overleveled.
SFX are also really inconsistent. You went through the effort to do some difficult redraws and then skipped ones that are on a blank background. Why?
If you choose to del-ray sfx, don't put the translations on top of the original, it just looks messy.
Also, chose a baseline font size and stick with it, except for emphasis when the original does so. Otherwise you'll get cases like pg 8, where the shouting hysterical girl has smaller text than the calm dad.