02 panel 1 "Hey, / Sayu-chan?" - Maybe split this as "Hey, / Sayu- / Chan?", or alternatively just move it down a few pixels. panel 2 "Yurika... / -san." I think it's generally considered correct to pair the dash with the upper line, so maybe "Yurika-... / san." would be better? panel 3 "...Yurika." Reduce font size slightly to bring in line with the original. panel 4 "A- again..." This line is originally handwritten. I think it'd be nice to use the floating dialogue font you employ throughout the rest of the chapter. 03 panel 6 "So what happened after that? "Right! Um, where was I..." Same as the last page, handwritten bubbles. 04 panel 1 So the "stare" in the original has an interesting effect, where the actual white outline has transparent space between itself and the text. This should be pretty easy to replicate by creating a second stroke layer above the white stroke, and setting it to 0 opacity. panel 3 "It's just / that you're / so much cuter / and more / stylish than / I am." -> "It's just / that you're / so much / cuter and / more sylish / than I am." panel 5 "So I'm thinking how I wanted to be more like y—" Seems like inconsistent tense? I'm not great with grammatical rules, but it sounds off to me. Maybe "wanted" -> "want", or "I'm thinking" -> "I was thinking". "please, you have no idea how much you're hurting me..." Would it be possible to put "me..." on it's own line here? I think the bubble shape would be better, but if you don't have the vertical space for it, then it should be fine as is. 05 panel 6 "Lucky we're both girls, right Sayu-chan♥" Missing punctuation. Also, maybe move it down a few px. 06 panel 4 "Why!?" This bubble uses the same font as the previous bubble, I believe. 07 panel 1 Maybe make the "B— Because," slightly larger to be more in line with the third text blurb? panel 3 "Can get 89%" and "Can get 71%" These boxes look to be written in the same narrative font that you used on p5. Missing floating text above Yurika's head. TL for it is "I'm not sure what I should say right now..." p12 panel 1 Initial narrative box is handwritten, weirdly enough. Up to you if you want to reflect that, I'm not really sure why the author did it that way. panel 3 "You've got to be kidding me..." is the same font as the one in the previous panel, "Wait, stop!!". p13 panel 1 missing "カリカリ。。。" next to Sayuri's head. panel 4 The ellipsis from the original Crinkle SFX wasn't removed. p17 panel 4 bubble 1 - I think it'd be a bit better to match the text breaks with the original here, by leaving the smaller first bubble as an ellipsis, and having the dialogue all in the second bubble. bubble 2 - I think this is the higher impact font again, like in the first panel. p18 panel 2 "I wanted / to start doing / more things / like this so / that I can look / cute like you." -> "I wanted to / start doing / more things / like this so / that I can / look cute / like you." Minor lining adjustments. panel 3 I really, really like the way you've shaped the sound effect here, but one minor thing is that the original text is very rounded and bubbly, while the english text is quite sharp, though it maintains the rather lighthearted feeling to it. I think it'd be nice to give the text a more rounded feeling, but I'm not entirely sure how practical that would be, given the complex background and the general pain of searching for the perfect font. I think it's already quite good as is, so don't worry about it if it's too much hassle. panel 4 missing "Kyaaa~" SFX. "We're at school! Class is about to start!" This text blurb is a bit tilted, similar to the "I love you!" bubble. p20 panel 2 missing "Glare" SFX. panel 4 Bubbles are handwritten, may be worth matching it. p21 panel 1 maybe change the "Unknown pose" box to be a bit more horizontal so you remove the word break? E.g. by selecting it and just flipping it 90 degrees clockwise. panel 2 "And I also never would have met you, Yurika." Maybe change this to never / would've / met you, / Yurika." Unless breaking the contraction is intentional. p22 panel 1 "Yurika, your right eyelash is coming off." Written in the high impact font. panel 2 "No!! Don't look at me! Turn away!" Written in the high impact font. panel 3 Missing "flush" SFX. p23 panel 2 "you're / already / so naturally / beautiful / without any." -> "you're / already so / naturally / beautiful / without / any." Minor lining adjustment. "I may / as well curl / your hair / while I'm / at it." -> "I may as / well curl / your hair / while I'm / at it." (Move "as" up.) panel 3 "And done! What a beauty!!" Written in the high impact font. panel 4 Missing "Squeeze" SFX. "I wouldn't want even more people hitting on you, you see." Missing emphasis on "more". p24 This entire page is written in the high impact font, but I couldn't really tell you why. panel 3 "Sparkle" is one SFX spanning both sides of her head, but I think it also works as is. p25 panel 1 and 2 The two side characters' bubbles are all handwritten here. p26 panel 2 "Maybe / she's jealous / of you." -> "Maybe she's / jealous of / you." Minor lining adjustment. p27 panel 2 Maybe make the text in the first bubble a bit larger to match the original? p28 panel 1 Top of Yurika's head looks to be missing a connecting redraw from the where the floating text was. p29 "No way!" "Mine's also[...]" "R— Really!?" "That— That's amazing" All are written in high impact font.